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Update use-server-side-rendering.md

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 ## Description
 
-Modern web applications feature a lot of interface elements that are stored in templates on the server. This template is downloaded with the application code and then rendered with, optionally, requested data from the server.
-This can dramatically increase the SCI in different scenarios: When the client device doesn't have access to green energy, when the page usage is short (for example: accidental clicks, pages with short dwell time like landing pages) or if a lot of server-round-trips are needed to gather data.
+Modern web applications feature a lot of interface elements that are stored in templates on the server. The template is downloaded with the application code and then rendered with requested data from the server.
+This can dramatically increase the SCI in different scenarios: When the client device doesn't have access to green energy, when the page usage is short (e.g. accidental clicks, pages with short dwell time like landing pages) or if a lot of server round-trips are needed to gather data.
 
 
 ## Solution
 
-Consider using server-side rendering as a method to reduce energy consumption on client side. Frameworks like Angular or React already provide solutions on how to implement this efficiently.
-Server side rendering can improve side loading times (including rendering time on slower hardware), reduce network requirements (less round trips needed), can utilize caching (pre-rendered pages can be stored on the client device).
+Consider using server-side rendering as a method to reduce energy consumption on the client side. Frameworks like Angular or React already provide solutions on how to implement this efficiently.
+Server side rendering can improve site loading times (including rendering time on slower hardware), reduce network requirements (less round trips needed), and utilize caching (pre-rendered pages can be stored on the client device).
 
 ## SCI Impact
 
 `SCI = (E * I) + M per R`  
 [Software Carbon Intensity Spec](https://grnsft.org/sci)
 
-Server side rendering affects the SCI in the following aspects:
+Server side rendering will impact SCI as follows:
 
 - `E`: Pre-rendering once can dramatically reduce energy consumption; pre-rendering on every request can reduce energy consumption if the server is more energy efficient and has access to green energy
 
 ## Assumptions
 
-- Assumes that the used frontend technology allows for pre-rendered content
-- Assumes that the web page is visited in high volume to affect the overall SCI impact
+- Assumes that the frontend technology being used allows for pre-rendered content
+- Assumes that the web page is visited in high enough volumes so as to affect the overall SCI
 
 ## Considerations
 
-- Consider using a caching mechanism to store rendered pages, if they change frequently but still are met with a high load. This can significantly reduce the server load by serving pre-rendered content for frequent requests.
+- Consider using a caching mechanism to store rendered pages if they change frequently but are still met with a high load. This can significantly reduce the server load by serving pre-rendered content for frequent requests.
 - Consider the other patterns in the web category
 
 ## References