tweak release notes (#83)

* tweak release notes

* improving my text

releases/2024-03-26-mondoo-10.9-is-out.md

@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ Let Mondoo do the heavy lifting when it comes to remediating critical software v
 
 ### Expose remote exploits in your infrastructure
 
-With the new "Remote execution" risk for CVEs and advisories, prioritize the highest risks to your business first. Sort CVEs and vendor advisories for remote execution and patch your most critical vulnerabilities before attackers find them.
+With the new "Remote execution" risk for CVEs and advisories, you can now prioritize and patch the highest risks to your business before attackers find them. Mondoo lets you sort by CVEs and vendor advisories that are known to be susceptible to remote code execution over the network.
 
 ![CVE-2023-22505 Remote Exploit](/img/releases/2024-03-26-mondoo-10.9-is-out/cve-2023-22505.png)
 
@@ -52,7 +52,7 @@ With the new "Remote execution" risk for CVEs and advisories, prioritize the hig
 
 ### Ansible scan interval / splay settings
 
-Control the scan interval and splay settings for Mondoo clients setup with the Mondoo Ansible role using new `splay` and `timer` variables.
+Control the scan interval and splay settings for Mondoo clients set up with the Mondoo Ansible role using new `splay` and `timer` variables.
 
 Learn more in our all [new Ansible docs](https://mondoo.com/docs/platform/infra/opsys/automation/ansible/)!
 
@@ -77,7 +77,7 @@ Want to take a peak at the configuration of Kubernetes integrations, but you onl
 - Show labels on the asset overview when an asset is unscored.
 - Update instructions and documentation links in Azure integration to match the latest Microsoft Entra ID pages.
 - Improve AWS integration error messages in the console.
-- Prevent a number of AWS scan requests from running at once in the AWS integration.
+- Prevent multiple AWS scan requests from running at once in the AWS integration.
 - Fix incorrect links in Red Hat advisories.
 - Fix newer vendor advisories showing as unscored when the attached CVEs have no score.
 - Improvements to Okta and Azure SCIM 2.0 support.